AHAP - ABC Team #2:
Greg-we can combine what you and I have written to make our final intro paragraph. I think with what we have we can make a good one.
Melissa-Are you going to write the conclusion?
Also i think we need to decide on our three subtobics. My opinion is that they should be:
1.Using wealth to gain political status, highlighting Tammany Hall as the main example
2.Bad working conditions, wages, hours
3.How they crushed strikes and labor movements (Pullman strike) and brought in scabs and others to replace emphasizing how they didn't care about workers
I'm going to plan on doing topic 1 as long as that is alrigt with everyone
-Jason
Sure, I wrote the conclusion but it's only three sentences. Feel free to look it over and edit it. And I'd be willing to do "Bad working conditions and hours" for my middle paragraph if that's okay with everyone.
~Melissa
I like the topic organization, but Tammany Hall has no real bearing on the economic situation we're discussing. It was a purely political entity, and Boss Tweed, while he made millions through graft and bribery, was never at any time in charge of any corporation. Instead of using Tammany Hall, there is a plethora of cartoons Ms. P's Powerpoints, which show the robber barons' corruption. And I'll take topic three, if you don't mind.
Also, I know this might be a little nitpicky but Mr. Furey always gave us hell for writing unbalanced paragraphs, meaning that if every paragraph should be about the same length, or if not you need to reorganize your essay. Maybe we can take a look at that when it comes time for final editing.
update: so I guess Jason has 1, Melissa has 2, and I have 3 for the body paragraphs.
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